Wednesday, January 7, 2015

Using Blogs to Help Become Better Writers

One of the great things about using a blog in the classroom is that we have access to 40% of the World's population - that's about 2.9 billion people if my math is correct! Here in grade 8 we are going to try and harness the power of the internet and all of its users to help us bump up our writing.

Please use the "Positive, To, and Try" model of leaving formative feedback (you can find an explanation for the "Positive, To, and Try" in previous posts). We hope that you can help! Please posting comments that will give us direct ideas on how to bump up our work.

Thanks in advance!


We used the mindmapping app called Popplet...

Haley:


Here is the first draft...




Popplet

Aiden


First Draft:

Aiden

Janine



Janine's First Draft



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7 comments:

  1. AnonymousJanuary 7, 2015 at 6:08 AM

    Adien: I really like your ending to the giver!! I like how you put a lot of detail into your writing!

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  2. AnonymousJanuary 7, 2015 at 6:13 AM

    Haley
    I like your creativity in writing the ending and how you brought Fiona back into the story.
    But you need to work on your sentences because one of them doesn't make sense.
    Also your dialogue should not be bold or spaced out so much.

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  3. AnonymousJanuary 7, 2015 at 6:29 AM

    Hey Haley I really liked your story,you had some good ideas.To bump up your work add some more ideas.Good luck Bestie.

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  4. AnonymousJanuary 7, 2015 at 6:35 AM

    Janine: I like how you put Rose Mary back into your story! Its really creative! You need to make sure your spelling and punctuation is correct. Good job!!!!!

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  5. AnonymousJanuary 7, 2015 at 6:35 AM

    Janine

    your ending is okay but you need a concluding sense. Why is Jonas talking in third person and in the same sense talking in first person.
    you need to work on your spelling and you also need to work on your grammar.

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  6. AnonymousJanuary 7, 2015 at 6:37 AM

    Hey Aiden your story was really good, you had lots of detail.Keep up the good work.

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  7. Mike Di DonatoJanuary 16, 2015 at 6:10 AM

    Aiden, as the comments above explain you did add a lot of detail. This is great for the reader as it allows them to visualize what you are writing about, therefor making it easier for the reader to understand. To make this even better, you need to check for grammar, especially when there is dialogue. If you clean the dialogue up, it will make it a lot more clear for your audience. Keep on truckin'!

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